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LEX COLLINS ARCHIVE (& FEEDBACK)

MATCH ROLEPLAYS

Engage 1: Origins (vs. Christian Valentine)
001: You're Not Your Job 

Engage 2: Round Two! Fight! (vs. Caite Blackbird)
002: A Walk
003: Fire It Up 


CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT

Interlude 001: Zig. No Zag. (06-24-2016)
Interlude 002: The Boy (Flashback) (07-02-2016)

[Jeremy King]

You're an excellent writer. The flow is beautiful (although I'll admit that the regional vernacular in match roleplays slows me down a lot). The dialogue - despite what I just said - is believable. The form and structure is as flawless as you'd expect from a writer at this level, if not a little more so. The way you write and your ability to do so is among some of the best that I've seen in this hobby. In an angled environment, with your activity levels, I imagine you'd "slay".

But in a competitive environment; more specifically, THIS competitive environment, I could see you struggling to get some momentum behind you. I imagine that someone with your talent MIGHT find difficulty in taking criticism or advice on how to "be better" but your issue is not in the writing as much as it's in the content. You won't lose to anyone in the grammar department, but you can be pushed and bested in the content department and people won't struggle to outscore you in the argument department at all.

As I say to everyone, check out those "How To" posts with regards to scoring as highly as possible here IF you're a handler who lives and dies by victories and defeats. If not then this is of no consequence to you. I've said it before and I'll say it again. You're a stunning WRITER and if you can craft pieces around the rubric at Engage, nobody will touch you. That's me giving you my honest opinion.