Dick Devereaux | RP Archive & Feedback

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WELCOME TO THE OFFICIAL DICK DEVEREAUX RP ARCHIVE & FEEDBACK THREAD

MATCH ROLEPLAYS:

Engage 1: Origins
'PICK YOUR POISON' CHALLENGE
Voidstar Vs Dick Devereaux
Hardcore Match

001 | Blood for Blood

Engage 2: ROUNG TWO! FIGHT!
NON-TITLE MATCH
Dick Devereaux Vs Georgia Mack
Singles Match

002 | The Gold Standard of Engage

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Feedback for the latest?


engagewrestling.proboards.com/thread/188/001-blood

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Hiya, just wanted to let you know that I will give feedback for your character but I just don't have enough of a feel for the character yet. Once I've seen more I'll be able to give proper feedback but I am reading all your stuff

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Feedback on 002 | The Gold Standard of Engage?

engagewrestling.proboards.com/thread/294/002-gold-standard-engage

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Feedback on 002 | The Gold Standard of Engage?

engagewrestling.proboards.com/thread/294/002-gold-standard-engage

I'm not the best on feedback but I will give it a shot since I read your RP.

I like how you set the scene. And how Dick put himself over as the only champion. That was a good point I didn't even see until I read your RP (probably should have seen it though).  I liked how you ended it, very easy to imagine it. I'm still learning who Dick Deveraux is. From your RP, I see him as a loner type guy who concentrates on the business. That's from him being in a dark gym. He's also quick to send himself into a little rage and has a mind for fighting more so than wrestling. That's the impression I got.

I liked some of your quips; Fly Swatter was a nice one.

My only thing I'd say, and this is really more about his character so you can ignore it. I'd like to understand his opinion on being the champ. Because he brought it up about halfway through the RP. It has me thinking does Dick define himself as champ or the champ is part of him. It started off to me that the belt wasn't a big part of him but then it swapped over to being all about the belt. That's just something I think you could answer in a CD, not a criticism because it kinda confused me on how important is to him.

If that's of any use to you. My thoughts....rambles..yeah 

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Jul 1, 2016 0:58:53 GMT @toxicdoll said:

Feedback on 002 | The Gold Standard of Engage?

engagewrestling.proboards.com/thread/294/002-gold-standard-engage

I'm not the best on feedback but I will give it a shot since I read your RP.

I like how you set the scene. And how Dick put himself over as the only champion. That was a good point I didn't even see until I read your RP (probably should have seen it though).  I liked how you ended it, very easy to imagine it. I'm still learning who Dick Deveraux is. From your RP, I see him as a loner type guy who concentrates on the business. That's from him being in a dark gym. He's also quick to send himself into a little rage and has a mind for fighting more so than wrestling. That's the impression I got.

I liked some of your quips; Fly Swatter was a nice one.

My only thing I'd say, and this is really more about his character so you can ignore it. I'd like to understand his opinion on being the champ. Because he brought it up about halfway through the RP. It has me thinking does Dick define himself as champ or the champ is part of him. It started off to me that the belt wasn't a big part of him but then it swapped over to being all about the belt. That's just something I think you could answer in a CD, not a criticism because it kinda confused me on how important is to him.

If that's of any use to you. My thoughts....rambles..yeah 

Appreciate the feedback as always!

I'll try to work on the understanding of him being Champ in my next one. So watch for that!

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Jul 1, 2016 1:59:19 GMT @dickdevereaux said:

Appreciate the feedback as always!

I'll try to work on the understanding of him being Champ in my next one. So watch for that!

I will

[Jeremy King]

I tend not to like overly descriptive prose. I prefer Hemingway's 'Iceberg Theory' because it allows me, as a reader, to picture the scene on my own terms. Having said that, I like the way you've described certain elements of your scenes in the last couple of pieces. You scored well this week, despite losing. Just keep following the "how to" guides that I posted because from our one to one chats, I get the feeling that winning and losing is very important to you. If that's the case, those posts will help you more than individual feedback ever could.