Caite Blackbird: Archive & Feedback

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THE CAITE BLACKBIRD ARCHIVE

COMPETITIVE ROLEPLAYS
Truly Bloody Better - 06/25/16 Vs. @keeganryan
Full House - 06/28/16 Vs. @collins
Say My Name - 07/01/16 Vs @collins

PRESS CONFERENCE APPEARANCES
The Launch - 06/22/16
Engage 1: Origins - Pre-Fight: 06/25/16
Engage 2: Round Two! Fight! - Pre-Fight: 06/27/16
Engage 3: Hell-Bent For Leather - Pre-Fight: 07/04/16

ENGAGE: GRILLED RESPONSES
Caite talks about wanting respect & the Engage World Championship.
Caite talks about her path to the Engage World Championship.
Caite talks about George Banks & The Dons Of Wrestling.
Caite picks her MOTN & POTN for Engage 1: Origins.
Caite talks about a Keegan Ryan rematch.
Caite places some bets on the Engage 2: Round Two! Fight! matches.

NOTABLE MOMENTS IN SOCIAL MEDIA
COMING SOON!

NON-COMPETITIVE ROLEPLAYS
COMING SOON!



As always, please feel free to leave any feedback on Caite or any of the above linked pieces below.

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it's hard to give in depth feedback this early on but what I will say is that, as usual, your pieces are written very well. You grasp the format well and for that reason I think you'll do well here, particular with the slightly amended judging criteria. The more recent character runs I have seen from you have been Ash Scion, Kyle Cross and for a little bit, Sasha Tyton. Apart from Sasha, those characters have a huge fan basis who love them and they feed from that enthusiasm which is great, but it also means that I'm looking forward to seeing Caite's journey. She has a lot of scepticism from her fans for her change of style; I'd like to see a bit more of that, probably in CD where she's perhaps come face to face with those fans. I know that your style doesn't really involve scenes as such, but I think a straight piece to camera as she recalls the event would work just as well

That's just my two cents. Like I say, I'm enjoying her so far anyway.

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Jun 26, 2016 14:10:52 GMT @georgiamack said:

it's hard to give in depth feedback this early on but what I will say is that, as usual, your pieces are written very well. You grasp the format well and for that reason I think you'll do well here, particular with the slightly amended judging criteria. The more recent character runs I have seen from you have been Ash Scion, Kyle Cross and for a little bit, Sasha Tyton. Apart from Sasha, those characters have a huge fan basis who love them and they feed from that enthusiasm which is great, but it also means that I'm looking forward to seeing Caite's journey. She has a lot of scepticism from her fans for her change of style; I'd like to see a bit more of that, probably in CD where she's perhaps come face to face with those fans. I know that your style doesn't really involve scenes as such, but I think a straight piece to camera as she recalls the event would work just as well

That's just my two cents. Like I say, I'm enjoying her so far anyway.

Thanks, @georgiamack. As always, I appreciate the feedback. I have a couple different ideas I'm kicking around for Blackbird CD pieces, and I'll take your suggestion into account when I sit down to write them.

Also, all links in the archive have now been updated.

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Maxed for the week, links updated.

Happy Canada Day all, especially you, @collins!

[Jeremy King]

I'm struggling to give you feedback here but only because I've already done so in previous feds. Nothing changes with you (and that's not a criticism). You just have your style and you run with it. Write, post and repeat. On that basis, I can't say anything more to you that I haven't already said before. Maybe a little more regional dialect from Caite, given her Northern Irish heritage and the fact that you are "the dialogue guy" would help give her more personality. Then again, there's a fine line with that because too much becomes almost like a parody. If anyone knows what just the right amount is, it's you.

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Jul 4, 2016 15:57:06 GMT Jeremy King said:

I'm struggling to give you feedback here but only because I've already done so in previous feds. Nothing changes with you (and that's not a criticism). You just have your style and you run with it. Write, post and repeat. On that basis, I can't say anything more to you that I haven't already said before. Maybe a little more regional dialect from Caite, given her Northern Irish heritage and the fact that you are "the dialogue guy" would help give her more personality. Then again, there's a fine line with that because too much becomes almost like a parody. If anyone knows what just the right amount is, it's you.

I've given some thought to increasing the amount of Norn Iron in Caite's speech, and will likely do so, but the issue with me hasn't been so much a matter of parody as it has been with just keeping it light enough so that anyone knows what the hell she's talking about.

Of course, I have to admit to a nagging itch I've had since Saturday afternoon (if not earlier) that you brought on concerning a specific redhead. Of course, the fact that Ash & Caite are nearly statistical twins would make THAT difficult, but the idea is definitely kicking around in there now.

Here's what I will say about writing naked shoot, the thing I've always been told I do fairly well... it looks easier than it is, at least to do well, and there's no one more aware then I am as to when I'm doing it poorly. Caite is still a work in progress, both in developing her voice and locking down her exact motivations. With Ash, that all came together over her first 6 months in eWo, so by the time you saw her, I knew exactly who she was, and that came across in a lot of subtle ways and mannerisms that Caite doesn't have yet.

And Ash had that cool catchphrase, too.

Thanks for the feedback, I'm going to try and return the favor, despite my long-standing reluctance to ever leave results feedback, over the next day or two.